a story i wrote at school [not finished]

[Chess]

Originally Posted by i_gangster_i

one word ROFLMFAO

*cough* ^^


QFT

[kickkcik]

Originally Posted by Mudkip

You are such epic story writer. Publish pls.

^^ thank you
i made added some more enjoy

[kissmydi*]

i have walked through a graveyard in the dark
i actually ran i was so creeped >.>

[kickkcik]

Originally Posted by kissmydi*

i have walked through a graveyard in the dark
i actually ran i was so creeped >.>

lol ^^ y were u scared?

[iScared]

so cute omg 5/5 i hope you become a writer

[Machiko]

Ya but Emma is 12 years old so i dun want taht story

[Senvae]

See, I told you guys, this is pure poetry. Only emo kids walk through graveyards for *****s and giggles.


Hah, just kidding dude, I have no idea if you're emo or not. I hope something scary is in that church. Like me or something.

[Ailysa]

I liked it how it was before...

[_Zephyre_]

[insert multiple comments as if implying a speechless comment here]

*begins to make a comment about inability to detect sarcasm*

*is satisfied with what the above line implies and doesn't*

[Misuzu]

Plenty of things I could say at this point, but I won't.

[kickkcik]

everyone i finished my story its a short one i know but it is all i remember so please just enjoy

[_Zephyre_]

Gah, okay, I'll be blunt and direct.

It's a complete, utter disgrace to this section of the forums. Your age is hardly an excuse. First, you might want to run that through your Spellchecker in MS Word. And for the sake of your readers' eyes, learn to split it up into paragraphs. Also, it seems pretty silly to announce the whole cast right at the beginning. You can just introduce them through text in the story itself.

C-C-C-C-C-COMBO BREAKER

[kickkcik]

Originally Posted by _Zephyre_

Gah, okay, I'll be blunt and direct.

It's a complete, utter disgrace to this section of the forums. Your age is hardly an excuse. First, you might want to run that through your Spellchecker in MS Word. And for the sake of your readers' eyes, learn to split it up into paragraphs. Also, it seems pretty silly to announce the whole cast right at the beginning. You can just introduce them through text in the story itself.

C-C-C-C-C-COMBO BREAKER

-.- dude i no good at spelling an i no good at story writing...
if you want ill try to work hard a school instead of atacking other kids and teachers

[_Zephyre_]

The former sounds like a much better idea compared to apparently meaningless assaults on other people as a show of superiority, mutiny or masculinity.

[kickkcik]

Originally Posted by _Zephyre_

The former sounds like a much better idea compared to apparently meaningless assaults on other people as a show of superiority, mutiny or masculinity.

...WTF does that mean