Sister Jackal

[Sparked]

hey soo i made a new movie, and i quite like this one ^_^

Size:64mb's
title: Sister Jackal
Length:4 minutes 2 seconds ( 4:02 )

Youtube link: YouTube - Sister Jackal

FileFront - sisterjackal_0002.wmv - FileFront.com

[InvadorZim]

music sounds like a cheap knock-off of the 300 trailer music =D

edit: as it gets further it sounds more like the real thing...is it the real song?

[Sparked]

Originally Posted by InvadorZim

music sounds like a cheap knock-off of the 300 trailer music =D

edit: as it gets further it sounds more like the real thing...is it the real song?

It is the real song.
Nine inch nails : just like you imagined LOL

[sir_lil3]

idk it alright

[Sparked]

Download link added.

[Mo Hawk]

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Btw new movie made ^_^
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Sister Jackal
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goes and looks
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yeah, and his sister died
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never seen a movie were the the main 2 people die..
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good or bad?
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or Awsome or TERIBLE
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i saw some things that made me go uhhh.
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like when they kill dessy
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on of the guys keep dropping meds
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not bad from only four of us making it
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imo
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not bad not bad at all
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kinda simple but still good
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that took me 3 hours to make
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from filimg to editing
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to finnished
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we started filming at 22:10 and finished filming by 23:30
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[ManCaptain]

Downloading now.

Good twist, an okay movie.

[Paul]

No offense man, but you've definately made better movies.

This one was pretty disappointing. None of your camera angles were very good. They were all shaky and didnt' fit together well. And I couldn't figure out what was actually going on. Even if the movie maker is bad at portraying their story or concept, I can usually figure out what they were going for. but I could just barely follow this one. I mean, the music was pretty good. But other than that, I would probably redo this one man.

I'd try to give you some advice, but since I can't even figure out what it was supposed to be, I can't really help with specifics. Just work on making your concept more clear, and make your angles more defined, and smoother. Also, I noticed some lag at the beginning. You want to avoid that, and refilm if that shows up.

Anyway, good luck with your future movies.

Edit: Alright, I re-watched it. I dunno why, but I guess I got distracted at some point while watching it. The storyline isn't as unclear as I originally thought. But I would still clarify that a bit more with your angles. I mean, you need to show a little more. For instance, in the sewer, when they were getting ready to fight. When they both do their emotes, you should get some up close angles of that. Or at least switch to a different angle in general. I mean, it makes it much more interesting for you to concentrate on her hand reaching out and taunting him, instead of keeping it at the same angle. That's just an example of what I'm talking about.

So I guess just think about things like that. You need many more angles, and you need to mix them up a bit. Don't move your free cam around so much either, because that looks like crap most of the time. And when you do have to move free cam, make sure it's not moving in seven different directions. Ninety nine times out of a hundred you only move it in one direction, and that's just for one shot, and then you cut to another shot.

So yeah.. There's some better advice than what I had previously given.

[YoUnique]

U was better at making sigs.

But it wasnt a bad movie but not so good either. Gl further

[Sparked]

Lol, tnx for the critaism paul.
I Think my main problam is that i rush things ( liek this only tookme 3 hours total )
Im making anther one soon. ill plan this one, Use better angles and spend a bit more time on the next one...


And ill take that as a compliment yoUniquie that im good at sigs ^_^



Edit
I removed the video from youtube as im going to re-make it, from replys this time.
Ill probaly start tomorow

[YoUnique]

^

goodjob finally someone who does something with the ciritism he gets like meh <3

[Sigh]

It was alright.

I didn't really understand it though.