The Waiting Room

Sigh · 01-13-2008, 07:56 AM

His eyes avoid the television set and his hands don’t bother reaching for the magazines. Instead he finds himself staring at the plain white tile floor and twiddling his thumbs over one another. On the couch he sits, waits, and clings on to that slightest hint of hope that there is left, that last bit of faith that promises him that she’s going to come out of this, live and well and ready to come back home to finish another forty years before she’s actually meant for it. But he knows he’s not one to decide, and all he can do is wait and pray; but as the doors swing open and the doctor unsnaps her mask he doesn’t need to hear her talk to already get the point. And as she speaks her first few words he can’t do anything else because the tears have exploded and all he can do is cry.

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Rushed, I know, definetely not my best, just trying to pitch some crap in since it feels dead here over yonder.

Senvae · 01-14-2008, 04:08 PM

I agree with you, this section is dying. Nothing going on but the GTDRPG.

This one was more interesting than your last though, lol. I liked it!

Wixern · 01-14-2008, 04:17 PM

I could probably liven up this place a bit with my new story, but I can't seem to find the inspiration. I've also been thinking about continuing my "Of noobs and newbs" series, but I don't really think I could make it interesting.

As for your work: short, as always, but that's not bad. You put a lot of detail into it, but it remains readable. A quick read, but interesting nonetheless.

Senvae · 01-14-2008, 05:40 PM

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Originally Posted by Wixern

I could probably liven up this place a bit with my new story, but I can't seem to find the inspiration. I've also been thinking about continuing my "Of noobs and newbs" series, but I don't really think I could make it interesting.

As for your work: short, as always, but that's not bad. You put a lot of detail into it, but it remains readable. A quick read, but interesting nonetheless.

Yeah I know how you feel. I've been slacking off on the Fiery Lotus big time. Its tough to find the proper inspiration sometimes.

... maybe I should just write a short one like Sigh, for the sake of this section... I do have a lot of sentiments on my mind....

Sarcor · 01-14-2008, 05:56 PM

K. it was good. But, like moar then a paragraph would be nice. (maybe 2?).

Juice · 01-14-2008, 06:11 PM

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Originally Posted by Sarcor

K. it was good. But, like moar then a paragraph would be nice. (maybe 2?).

that was the point doofus

short and powerfull

Senvae · 01-18-2008, 08:02 PM

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Originally Posted by Sarcor

K. it was good. But, like moar then a paragraph would be nice. (maybe 2?).

Nah, I wouldn't push for more. Sigh's stories are short but sweet, fun to read and not very time consuming. His earlier stories were the best, but this one signifies a return to his poetic roots....?? I hope so anyways.

01-13-2008, 07:56 AM	#1 (permalink)
Sigh Gunzfactorian Guardian Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: Singapore Posts: 1,767 Sigh's GamerBio	The Waiting Room His eyes avoid the television set and his hands don’t bother reaching for the magazines. Instead he finds himself staring at the plain white tile floor and twiddling his thumbs over one another. On the couch he sits, waits, and clings on to that slightest hint of hope that there is left, that last bit of faith that promises him that she’s going to come out of this, live and well and ready to come back home to finish another forty years before she’s actually meant for it. But he knows he’s not one to decide, and all he can do is wait and pray; but as the doors swing open and the doctor unsnaps her mask he doesn’t need to hear her talk to already get the point. And as she speaks her first few words he can’t do anything else because the tears have exploded and all he can do is cry. __________________________________________________ _______________ Rushed, I know, definetely not my best, just trying to pitch some crap in since it feels dead here over yonder. __________________ Rawr!@!

01-14-2008, 04:08 PM	#2 (permalink)
Senvae Gunzfactorian Patriot Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: Edmonton, Alberta Canada Posts: 404 Senvae's GamerBio	Re: The Waiting Room I agree with you, this section is dying. Nothing going on but the GTDRPG. This one was more interesting than your last though, lol. I liked it! __________________ Fan Fiction by Senvae THE FIERY LOTUS Part-1, Part-2, Part-3, Part-4, Part-5, Part 6, Part 7, Part 8 (Final Chapter)

01-14-2008, 04:17 PM	#3 (permalink)
Wixern Gunzfactorian Soldier Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: The Fan Fiction Section Posts: 935	Re: The Waiting Room I could probably liven up this place a bit with my new story, but I can't seem to find the inspiration. I've also been thinking about continuing my "Of noobs and newbs" series, but I don't really think I could make it interesting. As for your work: short, as always, but that's not bad. You put a lot of detail into it, but it remains readable. A quick read, but interesting nonetheless. __________________ Ijji Gunz: Wixern- level 50+ (Penguins) Revolver fanatic. TheRapist- level 50+ (Waffle) Revolver Lunatic.

01-14-2008, 05:56 PM	#5 (permalink)
Sarcor Gunzfactorian Guardian Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Past the sea of Gumdrops Posts: 1,029 Sarcor's GamerBio	Re: The Waiting Room K. it was good. But, like moar then a paragraph would be nice. (maybe 2?). __________________ Nagunz/IJJIgunz: HaxedSarcor [33] ßéßé [15] BACK IN ACTION P.S. +Rep anyone who likes Dragonforce. Remember 100+ posts +rep counts! Tired of begging for prems? Well why not make your own money!!---> http://adbux.org/?r=Sarcor