Lose to find

[Jacca]

You lost something to find this, What have you found?
Have the lies decieved us all, wrongly accused of nothing.
its the thing that no one hears, These silent sounds.
its because we live in fear, yet something was found.

The aftermath of what has been done;
the smashing sounds in the streets;
some people see this as fun,
and can become monsters in defeat.

Ego blinds us all, see this to be true.
the newcommers and the misguided insight.
everything is right, nothing can get by you.

for years ive just sat back.. holding my tongue.
Arguing the fact, this needs to be sung.
for those "Pros" out there amoung us...

this message is to you.. you know nothing of the fact like i do...
Defeat is one sided, Along with victory.
seen for what one might be is not who they are.
its who you want them to be.

[Sigh]

Bravo Bravo Bravo.

[Yune_]

Originally Posted by Jacca

You lost something to find this, What have you found?
Have the lies decieved us all, wrongly accused of nothing.
its the thing that no one hears, These silent sounds.
its because we live in fear, yet something was found.

The aftermath of what has been done;
the smashing sounds in the streets;
some people see this as fun,
and can become monsters in defeat.

Ego blinds us all, see this to be true.
the newcommers and the misguided insight.
everything is right, nothing can get by you.

for years ive just sat back.. holding my tongue.
Arguing the fact, this needs to be sung.
for those "Pros" out there amoung us...

this message is to you.. you know nothing of the fact like i do...
Defeat is one sided, Along with victory.
seen for what one might be is not who they are.
its who you want them to be.

qft... qft....

[Senvae]

Good, message. Your poem's structure and rhymes drifted away towards the end, but this isn't school so do as you wish. It's not like modern poetry is getting anymore solid anyways, quite the opposite in fact.

Welcome to Gunzfactor btw. (noticing this is your first post)