[Senvae]

Well I find the plot is as tight as it could be, but I could agree I have many characters. I did want to leave some openings for sequels, or side stories. Just in case I get bored and want to write some more after the main plot is done. But so far all the characters had their reasons for being present. I did skip a bit on the character developpement by accident, Doctor Hyde is based on an old friend of mine, and I write like everyone knew who he was...

The only idea people need to get in this plot is the fact that the Cardinal himself was being played by an even more dangerous man, and Senvae wants a piece of him to settle his internal dispute about faith.

As for realness in dialog, I try to make it decently real but at the same time it is meant to be literary. I want a certain class and feel to it.

As for the description comment, I have to agree it was a bit clumpy this time around. Aw well... I'll pay more attention next time.

Thanks for continuing to read my series Nose, always a pleasure to read your comments here.