
Originally Posted by
Paul Very nice. The best I've seen so far probably. Two little things that I didn't like about it near the end were the contrast pump at 1:50(way too high, subtlety is your friend) and the cut at 2:02. You should have shot the angle from the other side of her. Both shots were too similar to follow each other in sequence. Since you're representing two people on different sides of the same pillar, you want to establish that they're different sides. The way it is now, it almost looked like it was the same person changing into another costume. The background changes a little, but not noticably at all. Another way you could help this along(maybe) would be to put in a third angle(in addition to changing the second) farther out, where you show the two standing on either side of the pillar in the same shot, just before they dive out. Anyway, that cut was actually kind of a big deal, because it happened right at the end. The beginning and ending of the video are more important because the beginning sucks you in, and the ending leaves a lasting impression(which will be what the video is probably judged off of). So I would change that and re-submit it.
Otherwise, nice work.
Oh and you can easily cut down the number of tracks you're working with if you want to make editing easier. All you have to do is mix some of the clips into the huge empty space there in the other tracks. Mixing like that could probably cut your track number in half. Depends on the way you're editing it.