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    GUNZ: The Fiery Lotus Part 1

    Senvae’s breath drew waning clouds, as the long walk down the deserted St-Farling Street came to a stop. The night air was chilled in the little city of Qualiff, located in the askew province of St-Haberan. A little piece of land far away from the conflict that waged miles away, fought between Axium’s holy forces and the Travia Democratic Movement. This forgettable gathering of peasants they called a city had never seen war, nor heard it in the distance even. Some folks would call this a haven. Yet Senvae stood apathetic in front of the immaculate church. Nevertheless it was the first time he had ever witnessed one so perfect, untouched by bullets or rockets. Not even a few scars in the stone walls from swords, it was completely flawless. The tall sullen man nearly drew his revolvers at that moment, just to -baptize- the building with the usual scars that fit them so well. How sweet that would be, he thought. Senvae truly hated the Axium religion. They had broken through the law with their street gangs and clans, which had led them to overthrow the government of their state. All for the sake of their false god, they killed millions and destroyed the law, obliterated all the non-believers. The survivors of the original street wars had moved to the southern provinces, where the Axium grips of power struggled and waned due to the atrocious distance. All it took was a slow rebellion, and then the survivors won a new land they could call home. Travia raised its ashes, a democratic movement for those who wished to restore power into the hands of democracy instead of theocracy.

    All that happened long before Senvae was even born, but it didn’t change the fact that many of his brethrens fell at the hands of zealous Axium Knights or their infamous Gun Priests. Senvae felt estranged, standing in the foreign enemy city with nothing but his revolvers and his finest blade. His purpose that night was not to seek violence, though he brought the bare minimum. The man he sought would honor his visit in a courteous manner, he owed him that respect, but Senvae did not trust the man’s allies with similar fervor. Besides the revolvers and his sword, he brought his usual fighting clothes. He wore an illustrious long coat of navy markings and his lucky military hat. The formal military hat was an inheritance from his father, which he wore to every battle. Of course he was donned also with heavy battle gloves, semi-plated leather pants and heavy steel-toed boots. All the battle gear made him obvious to any Axium scouts, Senvae was aware of that. But since he was alone into this intrusion, he couldn’t risk any more compromise than leaving his shotgun and assault rifle at home.

    Senvae’s train of thoughts was broken by the loud footsteps of high-heel shoes on the stone paved road of St-Farling Street. The woman, whoever she might be, was walking his way behind him. If the shadow had wanted to kill him, she surely wouldn’t have walked so heedlessly and raucously. Hence, Senvae did not draw his weapons, but he kept his right hand on the handle of his holstered weapon, hanging heavily by the front side of his belt. He turned his head to glance at the intruder. At that moment, a certain sense of fear gripped him when he gazed at the beautiful woman walking his way. The long mauve winter coat fell around her slender figure, but it was unbuckled, revealing a pair of deadly revolvers attached in a V shape below her belt, just like his. Her eyes were lost in the shadow of her top hat and blonde hair.
    “…Athyanas…” he said to her, but mostly to himself. As if his lips moved by themselves, he couldn’t help saying her name. She was a feared Axium Knight by most Travia clans. Furthermore, the soldiers in Senvae’s clan often jested that they should get married since they fought the same way. It was true that Senvae relied profoundly on his fine revolvers and keen aim, and she did likewise if the stories were true. What mostly troubled him were the odds of running into an elite Axium Knight in this oft forgot province of bourgeois simpletons.
    “Travian, what are you doing here alone?” she replied in a cheerfully curious mannerism. “Do you have some sort of death wish?” She stared him down, probably to measure the man who dared to intrude nonchalantly into her country, and still she drew no weapons. Respectfully, Senvae did the same.
    “I have personal business here tonight, meeting an old friend. This is not about the clan wars, this is about brothers.” He turned to face her correctly. “I’m going into that church,” he corrected himself, “I have to go in that church, and talk to him.”
    “It insults you that a man born in Travia could fall so easily for the foolish religion?” she said sarcastically.
    “It’s not so simple, that man is my brother!”
    “I understand duty calls for you, but if I could please have a moment of your time before you enter that church…”
    “What do you want from me?!” he interrupted.
    “I have been looking for you for quite some time now Senvae, maybe even a full month.” She stepped a little closer by means to explain herself to him. “I met a man in your local tavern last winter. He told me he had fought against the Axium clans so I sat at his table and had a nice chat. After buying him a couple of drinks, he divulged some interesting information about the members of your clan. However the stories that most intrigued me were of your exploits.”
    “There are much better fighters than me out there to convert into your sick little religion. Why don’t you try a little harder?” he said satirically.
    “I am sorry if I gave you the impression that this conversation was about Axium duty. Although since we are on the subject of Axium, I’ve been meaning to ask you something. The drunken man also told me about Ryker, the young man who fought by your side then turned to Axium. He told me that you met him in battle several months later, and through all your rage for Axium and traitors, you still could not pull the final trigger once you had beaten him down.” At the mention of that incident, Senvae’s eyes narrowed in anger. He ignored what this woman possibly meant to achieve here, but he had lost interest in the conversation.
    “I have better things to do than explain myself to an Axium Knight. I’m going inside the church now, if you feel the need to stop me, be my guest.” He turned and walked up the stone steps towards the large wooden doors, while Athyanas stood patiently.
    “Go do your business then, I will stand here and await your return.” She called to him as he pushed open the massive doors.

    The church’s layout was very traditional, with wooden benches in parallel setting, facing the altar in the back. Kneeling in front of the altar, there was a man praying. He had long brown hair, cropped just below his chin, and he wore an elaborate leather trench coat with a large white cross sowed on the back. When the man heard Senvae’s steps come closer, he stood up serenely and turned to face him. They stared each other down, over ten bench rows apart. Senvae did not dare come closer. His brother was now a Gun Priest, so there were most certainly a few Axium knights guarding him from the shadows. He was disgusted by his little brother’s religious symbols hanging below his neck, sowed into his coat, marked on his gold rings. The symbols were everywhere, slapping the truth into Senvae’s face. He had heard as much from one of his clan members, a Travia scout had seen him leave a ceremony in one of the bigger cities. The scout followed him here where his peers stationed him. One could safely assume the ceremony was meant to inaugurate him into the Axium clan. His big brother started to blame himself for not watching him closely enough. Once he had grown into a man, he had chosen his clan and left home. Now it seemed as if a lot more had happened since, that Senvae had not been aware of. Under the church lights then, he barely recognized his brother. The gun priest was the first to break the silence.
    “So you’ve come at last big brother.” He said inquisitively.
    “Brandon, how dare you humiliate the family!” he replied aggressively. “Do you realize how insulting your actions are to our dear departed father?”
    “Why should I forego faith in our God, to satisfy father’s lust for vengeance and war? That’s blasphemy, and too long we have referred to democracy as an excuse for our war. But the only rule that matters is the rule of God!” As he spoke, two men to his right came out behind large pillars on the west side of the church, and two other from the east side. They carried heavy weaponry such as machine guns or shotguns, adorned in religious sigils and leather armor. “I have to excuse the name of our family to our Lord, I must undo our sins.” He drew no weapon but his soldiers held their aim towards Senvae.
    “So what…you’re going to kill me? You’re going to kill your own brother?” Senvae gave Brandon a stare that would turn oceans into ice, scanning his facial reaction to see if he would really dare.
    “This is not about family anymore Senvae, this is about faith in our Lord.” The melancholy in his tone warned his big brother that he was truly going to order the execution. Sure enough, a quick nod from Brandon set off the weapons into thunderous firepower. Senvae swiftly drew his sword and instantaneously dashed toward the marble pillars in the south hallway. His steel blade moved exceedingly fast, blocking all bullets that came his way, and made it behind one of those sturdy marble column. Bullets continued to rain his way, shredding pieces of the mast into a cloud of emerald colored dust.
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    When the firestorm ended, Senvae peeked hastily towards his opponents. They had moved out, probably looking to flank him. Few choices were left to him now, outnumbered five to one, he was most likely going to be flanked whether he liked it or not. So he took the initiative and drew his Gold Hound brand revolvers, dashing for the right side of the church in hope to clip off two of them summarily. But he had to act quickly since his Gold Hounds, grotesquely large six-shooters with rectangle heavy-duty barrels as long as his forearm, would divulge his location to the others with its cannon sound. Time of the essence, he took a running start and scaled the wall in a mad dash. As he came behind the first marble pillar, he found the first target. The young man in a brown coat had not seen this coming. Senvae was running higher on the wall than his line of sight. Firing one shot from his silver cannon, the man’s brains splattered all over the hard marble floor as the lifeless body tumbled from the Gold Hound’s force. The second enemy came out after hearing the gunshot but it was too late. Senvae was already jumping for him with his sword high above his head. The slash came down swift and steady, opening a gash along the forearm that held the shotgun. In adrenaline to save his life, the enemy tried to pull out a dagger with his free hand, though it was met with the Travian’s quick steel. Both arms wounded, the helpless opponent’s head was lopped off, all in a quick second.

    Having heard the thunder from the massive revolvers, the other Axium knights fired wildly for him, though Senvae was already running out towards the north end of the church. Most bullets hit marble and stone, trying to catch up his movement, but a lucky one found its way into his right leg. The Travian fighter came down hard on the solid floor. The impact shook him and knocked the breath from him, but the adrenaline of battle allowed him to roll behind a mainstay, out of gun sight. Damn! Now this could get complicated, he thought as he caught his breath. At that moment, the sound of glass breaking was heard on the west side, and then guns blazed through the echoing church hall. He took a quick glance behind his safe pillar and witnessed a queer sight. Athyanas had burst through the tall stained-glass windows, firing her revolvers, jumping off the walls, swinging her kodachis. That’s a sight for sore eyes, an Axium Knight fighting other Axium Knights, he thought. However his moment of thought was broken as he saw his brother dash towards the altar. Senvae hopped on his good leg, leaning on the pillar for support, and then he took a well-aimed shot at Brandon’s right leg. He saw his brother go down between the wooden benches and lost sight of him.
    “Brandon!” He called to him aloud. His call was answered with a storm of gunfire from his little brother’s semi-auto pistols. Senvae quickly rolled behind the marble column for protection, but it was not needed. The bullets sprayed blindly, hitting sundry objects, only a few hit the marble mast he used a shield. He must be wounded taking desperate shots like that, Senvae pondered. When the sound of the semi-auto pistols stopped, Senvae peeked at the battle between the Axium Knights. They were too busy to pay him mind so he rolled off the pillar and advanced towards Brandon, limping from his wound. Brandon struggled rising on his one leg, desperate to face his big brother face to face. Senvae lifted his heavy revolver and pointed it to the gun priest’s head, point blank.
    “C’mon brother,” Brandon pleaded to him, “You’re not going to kill your own blood are you?” He was sweating profusely from the tension of the situation and the painful wound. In the instant, Senvae had to ponder deeply before pulling the trigger. He took care of his little brother after the father’s death, like his own son. However this act of treason was unforgivable. Furthermore, the image of Ryker was coming back to him. The man he refused to kill so long ago, the young traitorous clansman. He couldn’t bring himself to execute his brother the way he failed to accomplish for a stranger. Senvae closed his eyes and searched his feelings. All sound ceased to exist around him, even the gunfight behind him between the Knights. The fleeting second felt like a lifetime to him.

    The silence broke like porcelain, as the thunderous sound of a gunshot ripped through the air. He opened his eyes and saw his brother collapse to the floor, but the wound was just above his ear and not on the forehead. Athyanas stood beside Brandon’s lifeless body, her Iron Crow revolver still smoking in the cool air. She glanced at Senvae in a compassionate smile.
    “Trust me, you don’t want to live with that on your conscience, not your own blood.” She said to him. He answered with a courteous nod, but he was still shocked from the whole ordeal.

    They walked out together in the sunrise kissed night sky, bathing in the dark blue light. Senvae looked at Athyanas, the woman fell into a new light by his eyes after the battle. This reputed Axium Knight had fought and killed her own kind to save the life of a Travian fighter. Athyanas must have seen the inquiring tone in his visage for she spoke first.
    “I asked about your pal Ryker and never got an answer.” She said. Senvae was a bit too staggered to answer right away, but she continued nonetheless. “I got my answer already. I’ve seen what you are and aren’t capable of. Quite frankly, it's what I expected. That’s why I shadowed you for a month, to be certain…” she reached for a pocket in her jacket and held out the gun that Brandon held at his death, pointing upwards still loaded.
    “Very few people have it in them to follow an ideal.” She explained. “It takes tremendous will power to resist the corruption, or simply to quit out of fear, sometimes frustration. My clan is an idealistic power, making it brittle to strangers. Most people would act interested in our ideas simply to infiltrate and bring us down from the inside. But you have the will and the wish to stop this war. That is why you never pulled the trigger at Ryker, and that is why you wouldn’t have pulled it back there. Sadly, this behavior is not hereditary.” She pulled on the barrel of Brandon’s gun and released a single bullet left in the chamber. Senvae gawked at the 9mm shell falling to the ground, an object that signified his brother’s intent to kill him after pleading for his life. Brandon’s blind spray of bullets had been a clever ploy to have his brother come to him with his guards down. He would have shot me the second I turned my back, he thought. To think that his own blood would be so disgraceful was too much for his to bear.
    “See, the world we live in is guarded by homeostasis. It is a principle that all things on earth are balanced and tends to stay that way. There is only light because of darkness, only truth because of lies. Peace will reign again, but before that there must be a war. We must be prepared to do what is necessary to achieve this peace.” She stopped to let her words weight in to the Travian. Senvae raised an intrigued eyebrow at her pretty speech.
    “Who are you?” he asked her.
    “I am…, my clan and I are the pivot, the balance, the light over our darkness. We are those who fight in the shadow so day will come again.” She gave him a smug look to that notion, waiting for a reaction. He was more than flabbergasted to this point, so silence was all she got from him.
    “You need some time to think this through, I know, but I would like to meet with you again soon and talk.” She said while flipping a card between her nimble fingers. She handed the business card to him. “I wrote the time and place on the back” She started to walk down the stairs, leaving him a courteous bow before deserting the scene.

    Senvae looked at the card bemused by what he saw. The title on the card said: The Fiery Lotus Clan. It had a sigil and an aphorism on it: The shinning blade against the darkened sky
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    I would just like to add that before conceiving this work, I tried several times to find an actual official story for GUNZ but did not find any. So I made this story up with what names and ressources I had fromt he game itself. I hope you all enjoy it.
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    That was excellent.

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    Thanks for the link of the official lore. I had not noticed it at all, lol . Aw well, I already started my own little world. But I do like what I started and might very well continue if I get more positive feedback. If enough people are interested in reading more, it would be motivating for writing a part 2 and beyond.

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    nice, must admit i think this is the best that has come out of the fanfiction since i decided to start writing in a way to persuade others to use this section. This is really good continue the story at least you will do something that I wanted to do but never had the time, always too busy or playing games or not bothering.

    After reading this it makes me feel like continue my stories, "i wonder if I cna still find my first original story", hmmm...?

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    Wooo Wooo Wooo Lets not get crazy now!
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    ^ do you mean me continuing my first original story or my claim that this has been the best that has come out of the fanfic section.

    If it it the second option you must post links to other materials that are better than this in the fanfic section cause i haven't read them.

    If it is me continuing my stories well i can understand... :-)

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    Thats a challenge?
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    hehehe i know thats why i said it :-)

    Well it shouldn't be too hard forgoodness sakes in GZF fanfic section, you just have to read what ppl post in the Garrison to know the fanfic would not be that great.

    Well happy hunting prove me wrong

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    I'll be waiting like the lonely squirrel that waits for the ever spring in its dream

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    Default Re: GUNZ: The Fiery Lotus Part1

    Thanks for the comments Pirate, I worked really hard on this and I'm glad it turned out ok. I had taken an extended break from writing my original novel and decided to use this as a practice ground. But I never do anything half-assed so this took me a week to write (between work lunch breaks). I would like to thank the soundtrack to the movie 300 composed by Tyler Bates for setting the mood while I write and blocking out the office sound behind me. LOL! I recommend that for you Pirate, but a classical score in the background to inspire your writing, its crazy what will come out. The best soundtrack I ever bought so far is "Gladiator" by Hans Zimmer, but for something like GUNZ you could use a modern sound like "The Island" by Steve Jablonsky. Thanks for the comments guys!

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    If anyonoe else has any comments about the story, be it good or bad (but please always respectful and mature), just leave the comment. If I get a good response I will begin to work on part 2 immediately.

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    Okay, so almost 100 people saw this story or peeked at it, but I got comments from 2 different people.....and a 3rd that didn't really say anything about my story. But still, the people at work and personal friends were eager for Part 2, so I post here the official annoucement that Part 2 is currently under construction. I plan to make it a bit more enticing and rich in possible plot so that if the story catches on with the fellow Gunzfactorian, I'll be ready for the long run. All I know so far is that there will be definitly a Part 3 as well. If I see all this hard work goes unoticed, I will kill this at 3. Byes for now!

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